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宾大文书解析 | 人生绝美,不过是初来乍到

2021-01-11 16:33:58 来源:江博教育 作者:江博教育

 人生有很多的第一次,它们总是不经意的到来。经历那一刻的我们,大多还没有掌控人生的能力,所以这些第一次都看似很轻很薄。如今,我们需要为人生做一次小结,将这些初次的体验一个个拾起。你是否在掂量着,纠结着,到底它们中的哪一个可以打动人心?

 

本文的作者选择了她第一次听音乐会的经历。她邀我们坐进舒适的音乐厅,和她一起回顾初次欣赏Dolly Parton歌声的体验,和我们分享时隔多年的今天,她如何看待同样一场演出。你也许会惊讶,在音乐厅这样的方寸之地,一个人也可以静静成熟。很多人认为,精彩的文书需要环境复杂、情节跌宕。本文的作者再次向我们证明,一个合格的申请人应当具备这样的能力:将你的文书扭转到让你感到有激情的话题上。不费力揣测招生官的口味,不畏惧坚持自我的风险。

 

 

 

DOLLY PARTON, THEN AND NOW

 

by Allison Rapoport (admitted by the University of Pennsylvania)

 

I first became aware of the transformative power of music when I attended my first live concert. This was my first weeknight excursion with my father, the culmination of many episodes of desperate begging and pleading. Dolly Parton. The sound of her name alone was enough to get my pulse racing, my feet tapping. I knew every chord, every lyric, of every song. However, if Dolly had walked past me on the street I would not have recognized her. Up until this concert I had only experienced music through my 1960s era Realistic radio. It was neither an attractive nor a reliable piece of equipment: paint-splattered, with a broken antenna and a faulty speaker which gave way to a gritty, faltering sound. I had never been disappointed by it. This night would leave my expectations forever changed.

 

In person, Dolly’s singing was crisp, processed, easier to digest and presented with an intensity that my radio had somehow filtered out. I was captivated, absorbing every word and every visual cue from this highly engaging and amusing speaker. I grinned, and danced. I stood on my seat in my effort to hear better, to get a better view of the stage. I marveled at how lucky I was to be in the presence of such a beautiful and talented woman, whose sequins and smiles lit up the theatre in rapid succession.

 

I left the concert feeling utterly elated. I had discovered a new context in which to set my musical appreciation. This revelation would set me on a search for more moments where I could be similarly elevated, a search that continues to this day. With theses memories in mine I once again sought out a Dolly Parton show this past October. My hope was to rekindle the emotions this experience has stirred in me a child. What I saw in this revisit, however, was a complete reversal. From this vantage point I could see that the idol of my childhood was lip-syncing every word. She merely pretended to play the instruments set before her, and the onstage banter that had once titillated me now seemed crude and unsophisticated. I did not dance, and I rarely smiled. As I began to second-guess my memory of my first concert, my attention drifted away from the stage. Then I spotted hera younger girl standing in front row. Eyes widened, she stood motionless, mesmerized by the scene before her. We experienced the same concert, but while she longed to be pulled in, I could not help but pull away.

 

My first concert instilled in me a wonderful sense of what visual components of a live show can yielda magical and enlightening experience that entertains without distracting from the music. I found myself unable to recreate the feelings it stirred in me. However, I do not regret my attempt to discover them anew, as I realized something important about the moments I inhabit. Even if I were given the opportunity to return to the exact place and time of the first Dolly Parton performance, I would still not feel completely the same as I once did. Experiences are shaped not only by the circumstances that surround them, but also by the perspectives that we bring. Perceptions change and evolve inevitably as the mind matures. This is a process that should not be lamented, but rather, embraced. It is what fueled my search for Dolly’s music in the first place, and it motivates me to search for the next music, the next transformative experience that will resonate with my present state of mind. My first concert showed me that the search is worthwhile. My revisit demonstrated to me that the search will never end, nor should it.

 

一、生词:

 

1. excursion /ɪkˈskɜːrʒn/ n. 偏移;远足;短程旅行;离题;游览,游览团

2. culmination/kʌlmɪˈneɪʃn/ n. 顶点;高潮

3. paint-splattered 溅满油漆或染料的

4. antenna/ænˈtenə/ n. [电讯] 天线;[动] 触角,[昆] 触须

5. gritty/ˈɡrɪti/ adj. 坚韧不拔的;有砂砾的;多沙的;像砂的

6. sequin/ˈsiːkwɪn/ n. 作衣服饰物用之小金属片;古威尼斯金币

7. elated/ɪˈleɪtɪd/ adj. 兴高采烈的;得意洋洋的 ; v. 使兴奋(elate的过去式和过去分词)

8. revelation/ˌrevəˈleɪʃn/ n. 启示;揭露;出乎意料的事;被揭露的真相

9. reversal/rɪˈvɜːrsl/  n. 逆转;[摄] 反转;[法] 撤销

10. lip-syncing/ˈlɪp sɪŋk/ vt. 对口; vi. 对口型; n. 对嘴配音

11.banter /ˈbæntər/ n. 无恶意的玩笑

12. titillate /ˈtɪtɪleɪt/ vt. 使觉得痒;使高兴; vi. 感到兴奋;被激发

 

二、语言解析:

 

1. Dolly Parton: 美国歌手, 代表作为Joshua

 

2. the culmination of many episodes of desperate begging and pleading.

用名词“culmination”模糊施动者“我”,使句子没有那么单调,这种处理方式值得借鉴;

 

3. The sound of her name alone was enough to get my pulse racing, my feet tapping.

“pulse racing”和“feet tapping”是作者身体的反应,感官描写会比“excited”这样简单的形容词更有带入感。

 

4. Dolly’s singing was crisp, processed, easier to digest and presented with an intensity that my radio had somehow filtered out.

“crisp, processed, easier to digest”, 将没有具体形象的声音描写的具有歌唱者本人的特点,且与前文收音机里“gritty, faltering”的声音形成鲜明对比。

 

5. sequins and smiles lit up the theatre.  

“sequins”和“smiles” 押韵,同时,把sequins闪亮的属性过度给smiles。 

 

6. This revelation would set me on a search for more moments where I could be similarly elevated, a search that continues to this day.

本句起到承上启下的作用,柳暗花明又一村的感觉。如果精彩的个人经历是一颗颗珍珠,那么这样衔接性的句子就是将珍珠串起来的线,和谐,舒适,且衔接紧密。文书的字数都是有限的,如何自然、迅速过度到下一个片段?意识流的文章往往就是依靠这样一个简短的句子完成的,故事性的文章也可以考虑使用对话。

 

7. Experiences are shaped not only by the circumstances that surround them, but also by the perspectives that we bring.

此句为本文的主旨句,是后文升华的开始。只看前文,只是一件普通的、能勾起很多人相似回忆的生活琐事。此句决定了文章的思考深度和价值。

 

8. Perceptions change and evolve inevitably as the mind matures. This is a process that should not be lamented, but rather, embraced.  

“lamented”和“embraced”是两种看待事物变迁的态度。是悲秋伤怀,还是勇敢面对?作者选择了后者。没有直接地去劝导读者做同样的选择,但是已经达到了循循善诱、引起共鸣的作用。

 

9. My first concert showed me that the search is worthwhile. My revisit demonstrated to me that the search will never end, nor should it.

文章戛然而止,开放式的结尾,让人不禁联想,作者以后的人生都会积极的体验、接受或好或坏的变化。也不禁会联想到我们自己,如何看待过去、眼前、未来的变化。

 

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